It's something

I'm glad I took this mod as I really enjoy learning how to write a story.
It's been a while since I actually worked hard for a mod because I actually want to learn.
So this is my synopsis draft 1.
It's pretty incoherent cause I had to rush it in 2 days and there are probably bad grammatical errors or weird sentence structures as my English isn't the best since primary school hahaha.
Worth giving a shot.

"Maun sits on a bench in a quiet park with a book in his hands. He flips open the book and starts tearing. In the book shows a calendar with a marked-out date and a goodbye message for Maun. An old man walks towards Maun and asks why is he crying. Maun is shocked to hear a voice. Maun pulls out a pen and a paper from his bag and starts communicating with the old man. The old man stands up and signals for Maun to follow him. Maun follows behind the old man. They walk past several streets and sees the world without verbal communication. The two continue walking silently through the bustling street when the old man stops and turns into an alley. At the end of the alley is a door. The old man instructs Maun to wait outside as he enters the door. The old man comes out with a device in his hand and explains to Maun that the device gives users the ability to speak. However, the user must speak the truth or else the device will erase all memories of the person he lies to and in addition, the device will stick to the user for life. Maun takes the device from the old man and wears it. He walks out of the alley and heads back home, keeping quiet the whole time.

Maun reaches home and sees his friend Rena lying on the couch. On the table, there are some empty cans of beer and an apology note. Maun calls for the ambulance as he hugs Rena while waiting for the ambulance. At the hospital, the doctor shows Maun her report. Rena survives the overdosage of anti-depressant. She wakes up the next morning, looks at Maun and writes on a paper saying how she fails at everything. Maun sits beside her and holds her hand, not saying anything. Rena discharges from the hospital the next morning. While driving Rena home, Maun reveals his ability to speak. Maun mentions about the device and the strange old man he met. He does not tell her about the consequence of lying while wearing the device.

Back at home, Maun helps Rena to her bedroom. Rena assure Maun that she will not commit suicide again. Maun remembers Rena’s suicide plan but speaks nothing about it. Maun sings Rena to sleep. He walks to the living room and takes the book out from his bag. He reads it again and places the book silently back into Rena’s drawer. He leaves the house and drives to find the old man. Maun walks into the alley and knocks on the old man’s door. Maun questions about the device’s ability to erase memory. The old man takes him to a nearby convenience store and does a simple experiment with Maun. Maun realises the old man is not lying. Maun drives to the beach where he first met Rena. A flashback shows how Rena met Maun and comforted him when his Mum took her own life. Maun shouts at the top of his lungs towards the sea.

Night falls and Maun drives back home. Rena sits on the couch with dinner ready on the table. After dinner, the two cuddles in the couch while sipping wine. They talk about the past till they fall asleep. Maun wakes up with Rena lying on his chest. He stands up and carries Rena into her bedroom. He kisses her on the forehead, tucks her to sleep and whispers a lie while she is asleep. The scene cuts to the next morning when Rena is awakened by the sound of police sirens. Rena walks towards the knocking door and receives the news that Maun has committed suicide. She breaks down and the film dips to black. Three days later; which is the day Rena plans on committing suicide, Rena wears the device that Maun left behind and gives a eulogy at his funeral. She goes back home after giving the eulogy. Rena goes to her drawer and realises a voice recorder beside her book. She cries when she finds out that Maun had been suicidal all this while too ever since his Mum passed away and it was Rena who has kept him alive till this day. Maun hoped that Rena understands her worth and importance in life and makes use of the device to save lives. Rena erases the circle around ‘10 May’."

Boo, actually it's so incoherent and so many loopholes that I can find. I hope to refine it even further. Might post the actual screen play here too! The story might change a lot too after the lecturer comments on it so it's still quite uncertain. But I'm honestly very humbled to be learning from an actual Singaporean screen writer. 

There was so much going through my head the entire time while I write the synopsis. I can't imagine writing the screenplay hahaha.